Wow! I thought that other piece may have been a one off, but again, I've added this to my favourite poems, and I've given it 5/5. It's great. All that I said in the last poem applies here, only this time, I'm wowed by your ability to make a well known piece into your own. Very well done, once again. I'm unbelievably impressed (Not that you really care, I'm sure, lol)

Brad

I don't care for dark poems whatsoever, but I really wanted to read your poems. So I started with this because of the name!

Emotion seems so far away
A poison so divine,
I long to feel a loving hold
A heart in which is mine

I think this is so beautiful. Longing for a heart in which is yours. The idea of that just sounds so beautiful. The words you chose so powerful.

Heavens beauty opens now
Yet this darkness blinds my way,
Guide me through the shadows
For I know not the words to pray

I can picture this. And I completely understand it. Your use of words make this stanza very visible.

These broken eyes are heavy
For a prince I cannot wait,
I've searched for an eternity
Now this seclusion is my fate

Waiting, only to never find it. Opposite of most love stories. I love when there isn't always a happy ending. Life isn't all happy endings.

To feel loves first true kiss
I've Wished for so very long,
This heartbeat is getting slower
Theres no melody in this song

Still longing and knowing that you will never get what your heart truly wants. I love the fact that you mention a heartbeat slowing as you come to an end.

Prince you may have come for me
By my side you'd forever stay
Yet to this slumber I am bound
For this bed in death I lay

Finally reaching you and being too late. I really really enjoyed reading this poem! I love how you wrote it and the words fit so perfectly well! The poem is so visual to me and I was just sucked into it. Great poem!

Keep up im likeing them

Emotion seems so far away
A poison so divine,
^^^
Loved your opening !

The flow was perfect and very captivating !
The title fit perfectly

Excellent read !

Luanne

Awwh Wow an Awesome poem!!

"Prince you may have come for me
By my side you'd forever stay
Yet to this slumber I am bound
For this bed in death I lay"

A really sad poem, but full of emotion. Love the title too, it goes really well with the meaning of the poem.

5/5 I love your poetry =)

Very well written. I loved it. One of the best lines was: Theres no melody in this song. Keep on writing like this.

This is really creative and filled with such emotion. The beginning and ending were my favourites