"redefining consciousness,"
Amazing line.

I don't know what the last line means, but I still like this.
There's great meaning within this if you link it back to life and the situations in life.
I can't really think of anything more to comment on.

Good use of vocabulary and punctuation :) it's always great to read.
Solid poem, 5/5

jess ~

I hope that one day I can write as good as you! your language is just way up there with the best and the creativity of that french line is awe-inspiring. A clear 5!