When the world turns upside down,
all smiles turn to frowns,
I'll try and give you
something to smile about
But in return I'll ask you for a favor,
stay with me
and give these dull days some flavor
I'll ask you to hold my hand
help me understand
the physics of smiling
In this upside down world,
we'll be its awkward fling

This is how I would present it...
- use as little interpunction as possible
-try to avoid using the same word more than once (and)

I hope you appreciate my input, it's just some advice you are free to take it or ignore it:)

Happy writings,

5/5 Ingrid
ps: I liked the poem how it was, these things are just minor adjustments:)

Wow. i love this poem poem. It is really well written and entertaining. keep up the good work. ~KM~

Yah agree with blond,,
but its great,,
i feel it,,
lol

xD
dirtyhands

I definitely enjoyed taking my team to read this poem.
i love it.=D

Time*

I think you brought out the physics of smiling in this poem. I especially liked the first two lines.

Love it. Perfect title. It caught my attention and didn't dissapoint. Great job.

Wow, sounds like my ex. She always talked of her boring life, and I was the spice. lol. Well, she realized how spicy it would get, when danger from my past caught up. 5/5 for this poem as well.
Aaron

Aaaw...i think this poem is soo cute!!
i really like the flow in this poem..
the free style to it fits really good aswell!!