Absolutely amazing writing. I am just astonished. Your flow and everything is just perfect. Thank you so much for sharing your masterpieces.

Admiring your work,
Noor

The vivid imagery in this piece paints a sad picture. Good flow and rhythm. The piece is void of forced rhyming. Excellent, articulate word choice. Well worth the read.

My only suggestion is:

^unborn poetry cling to open wounds,^ to add an d on the end of cling.

great job!!

Oops, a typo, I meant to add an S on the end of cling!

As always you write beautifully, I especially liked this piece, your opening stanza was just fantastic, but your ending line, for me was great, I don't know why, it just sticks with me.

unborn poetry cling to open wounds,

^This was the only line that gave me pause, it is the words cling

Fantastic write as always, thanks so much for entering the contest.