Comments : Ordinary days

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Wow! This is moving and...meaningful...and so sad! I love this poem! Brilliant!
    It flows well, it has a good rhythm.
    ooh, one grammatical mistake:
    'why don't keep us happy?'
    should be
    'why don't you keep us happy?"
    that was all! I really enjoyed this, I am so printing it!
    You had a lot of great one liners in this...beautiful.