by Steven Topaz
Firstly I dont know really how you write so ill judge just on this poem, You need to decide weither or not to ryhme or not to ryhme this makes the flow very bumpy and hard to catch on to. When you started to ryhme i thought you were going to keep ryhming but then you went back to freestyle in stanza 3. |
by Katie
Aww, I really like this poem. It's sweet without being mushy. 5/5 definitely |
In this poem I like how you have chosen to write about your feelings and emotions. it gives the rader a clear picture into what your feeling and so they can possibly relate to that in there own minds. |