by aubrey Nov 7, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
"I'm Sorry" is what you always say |
I love the message, the flow was okay. I think you need to work on your rhyming. My advice is to not try to make it rhyme 100% use fake rhymes. This way you dont have to sacrifice important meaning for rhymes. Otherwise I think the poem was real, which is what really counts |