"Night swallows me whole, down its long, sequined throat,"
`This was just absolutely stunning darling. You really capture the readers attention. I just LOVED the wording. Flawless! "Down its long, sequined throat," - Wooow. Word choice is greeat. (:

"Nearly extinguishing all other light but that which belongs to him."
` Extinguishing was perfectly inserted in this line!

"Now lying in twinkling stomach, I'm reminded of your crepuscular charms."
`Not quite sure what crespuscular means, but your word choice is just totally blowing me away. Literally, this is above and beyond what I expected.

"Never thought I'd crave your presence so much as I do right now."
`Simply worded, yet you let us know how you feel. :]

"Needing your brawny arms and velvet voice to rescue me, before this"
`Novalyn! Woow. I adored this line! I mean, brawny and velvet... outstanding adjectives and yet again you are expressing your feelings and such in a wonderful way.

"Nihilistic valley of still time digests the rest of my heart."
`Digests.. woow, you don't hear that used very often like you did here. Unique :]

"Next to vertebrae and oxygen, you alone are my necessity, my love."
`Aww, this was very cute. :]

Beautiful write.
Overall, its above and beyond.
You are a spectacular poet!
:]
5/5

Yes nice job 5/5

Hmm, I like this poem. The format isn't may favorit. But that doesn't really matter. The word choice that you used through out the poem was great. The flow was also good. I gave it a 5/5

Your word choice was brilliant and highly original.A very nice form and scheme.5/5

-Amber