Aw, Amber this is a beautiful piece. I can sense with every word that it truly came from your heart. (: The fluidity was solid, and as they are lyrics -- it was not too cryptic at all, which is perfect. I love the line about angels flying away ... very sad. The story portrayed is one many can get it touch with personally. Overall a wonderful job, dear. One typo I saw though on this line: |
by Steven Topaz
It felt like the same read as the song from before, same problem same situation just put into different words, but based on this song without the one i just read, it was a 4/5, idk its hard for me to rate songs, because im putting it to my own melody, and it doesnt turn out right as your melody. The chorus seemed to much repeated, some repeating gets the point across and if its done just right it leaves a lasting effect, but that was the only thing i can really critique on, the very first stanza was extremely original and non complex like songs are suppose to be, a good way to get somebodys attention and listen to the rest, you should publish the songs on myspace. |
by HvN
So incredible, please teach me to write like you?! :] |
Wow, excellent song. As I read it, I started to sing it, and the flow and feel was outstanding!!! The overall structure and use of vocab in all the right places put it in #1 in the charts (if it was released, in my opinion) Excellent write, keep up the fantastic work. |
by Dark Savior
I really liked this poem. I could see a woman following a man, only to find out that she's following herself. |
by Teria
I absolutely love this song. I almost felt the beat. Of course it was more of a reading beat. I hate not knowing how songs are going to be sung, you can only imagine... and everyone imagines differently. |
You know these 2 songs alone should make you one of the greatest song writers. i know this much it makes you one of my fav poets on here. im utterly speechless in the presence of your work *bows*--- |
Know how a breaking heart sounds and I know the pain. |
by jutt
Wow that was awsome. I have dealt with the same situations as the person you describe. I really needed someone like you when I was 17. Very inspirational writing. |
by Cyber Saiyan
Great work; really well written and easy to put to any type of music. |
by Sumit Ojha
Excellent work :) |