Woooow, this poem was full of repetition, and to be honest with you.. that's why I didn't really enjoy it.. I thought it really took away from the words you were trying to say. :/ A little repetition is okay, but I thought you kind of went over a bit here. Eliminate some of the repetition and word in it your own words so that it's unique and appealing to the reader. 4/5.

I think that you over did the repetition by a lot. It made it hard for me to enjoy it. Other then that it was ok. 4/5

Very meaningful and to the point. I like it very much! (5/5)

Excellent poem, it is really good, i cant wait for you to write more. I'm gonna be putting my poems and doing skis and such on you tube at ItsAJGTV. hopfully i will have your support.