This is heart breaking :(
Some lines are a little long, but it helps to the disjointment of the topic.
What a great poem though!
I don't usually like rhyming poems, but this one is great. I really liked it, keep writing!

Wow. Mercury hits it right on by describing this poem as "heart breaking". I like how you used the whole concept of drugs and the "two straight lines". I think it brings it all together very well. I can see you have some talent. Keep on writing :)

God Bless,
Sarah