A Look Into The Heart

by BREEawNUHH   Nov 9, 2008


*Actual Title: A Look Into The Heart Of A Girl Who Has Found A New Love*

*First poem in over a month. Enjoy. rofl.*

Almost three years ago
I was crawling on my knees.
Begging you to stay here
crying and saying please.

I thought you were the one
but now I know I was wrong.
Getting over you was hard
but I knew I had to stay strong.

A year and a few months ago
someone came into my life.
The guy who I never thought
could take away the pain and strife.

He was kind and sweet too
and he really made me smile.
We became close friends
in such a short while.

Even today we're still friends
but he's stolen my heart.
He's nothing like you though,
this boy won't tear me apart.

Briana Coulter
11.09.08

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  • 16 years ago

    by brokenhearted

    OMG!!
    This is so much liike me.
    I loved iiittt. :].
    Keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by biancaa

    I like it. problem and resolve. good job =)

  • 16 years ago

    by StillxBreathing

    I like the (kind of) surprise ending. =] how at first you were getting over him then you were like, he wont hurt me like you did.
    it was nice.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Bree,

    First poem in a month..well, if you are going to wait a month before posting you may as well make it a good one...and you have.

    You have excellent technique in your writing, using a clear format, which uses good flow and rhyme. Along with this you have told this personal love story about a boy who hurt you really badly. This isn't specificallyu about him, rather the lesson that you have learnt with this new love. He may have your heart, but keeping a piece back for you, not giving everything helps to keep a person grounded.

    Well done, a very mature poem.

    Take care

    Michael

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Very sweet, simple.. yet it explains that in this short period of time you've found someone who takes away the pain and strife and he has your heart. Simple, yet beautiful. It's a good start to pick your writing back up where you left off. Keep it up. Don't give up. I look forward to more poems sooon. (: 5/5 Glad to see you writing again!

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