Comments : What Kind of Fool Do You Think I Am?

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    "You're stupid to understand,"
    should be
    "your to stupid to understabd"
    it did sound right before.

    Other then that I see nothing wrong with this poem. Everything about it is good. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    I've shed tears for you,
    Tears you never noticed.
    You're stupid to understand,
    How much I really cared for you.

    Is there something wrong with me?
    Am I doing something wrong?
    No, that's not it, this I know.
    I won't blame myself no more.

    The repetition in the two first stanzas kind of throw the read off .. Try to find synonyms to replace you & wrong , or reword it .

    I've been there for you listening and helping you.
    But it's all worthless and disappointing.
    You made me feel like a big failure,
    Like I didn't do enough to help you out.

    I thought you had really changed,
    But you led me to believe your lies again.
    You don't want a relationship,
    Or maybe you just don't want me.

    It's ok though, you're not the only one out there.
    There are better guys, better than you.
    You'll regret losing what you had,
    But when you do, I'll be out of your life.

    This last stanza has alot of meaning , the only thing I would change is the last line , instead of but when you do , By the time you do . It has more of an impact .

    The over all idea is something easy to relate to . You could perhaps use some bigger more powerful words ... Since it seems like it should be more of a stricking subject . 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    "You're stupid to understand,"
    would be more understandable as
    You're too stupid to understand,
    over all the poem vented emotion while getting its point across really well

  • 16 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    Ay baby, I've never ever seen u write a poem like this. Me encanto mi amor. Te amo y te extrano. Come home already.

    Ur man jose...

  • 15 years ago

    by Teria

    Do you mean "fool"?

    Other than the title there seems to be nothing wrong with the poem. It's well written. A few spots were a bit off in flow, I noticed. But not so much that it messed the poem up. Good meaning/emotion through-out.

  • 15 years ago

    by SADADDY

    You have expressed your heart felt feelings very well in this write...may peace and joy fill your heart each and everyday.

    sadaddy