"Cause you have this effect" << effect = affect.

"And it's all over- done
But..."
^^ " And it's all over, done."

- I get with the lines above that you're trying to have a good connection with the two stanzas by using "and", but personally I think it's better without it and it still gets the point across, just less bluntly. I've always thought 'and' was just a blunt word and should only be used if needed, and it's definitely not needed here.

You have a great poem, I like how you put it together. The fact that there doesn't seem to be a reasonable syllable count from line to line is good. but, what's so good about is that you pulled it off. A lot of people cut the lines off at the wrong time or make one too long and one too short. But, you did a good job with it. And, it's a great poem. Really relatable.