Cara,

I can only imagine how hard it must be for a young woman to grow up without her mother.
This verse was very touching and so filled with pain...
I think we can only go to heaven when God calls for us and no sooner, my dear.
Be strong and make a success out of your life, I am sure your mama will be watching you from way up high and applauding you:)

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

Beautiful yet sad poem. Tears came to my eyes. Nothing can replace a mother's love, not having a mom around can be very difficult, yet dads do has nearly the same powers of comfort and protection.
I so much admire and enjoyed your writings, keep it up, kel.

I really truly enjoyed this poem.
It brought tears to my eyes. I also noted down the bottom that it wasn't from a personal experience, but it is written as if it was.

Very well done, and keep it up.
You have amazing talent.

Jen. x

P.S Thank you for your comment. :)

Let me say i was pleased to see it was a fictional poem, it made me feel happy until i got to where you said your Mum had died and that made me goosebump sad, all in all to be able to invoke these emotions in a reader you have to have done your job well which you most certainly did.
Well done on a well written poem

Grant

Ur very talented.. I like the way u write ur poems, keep it up 5/5

Wow Cara, this poem is just filled with innocences...I like the way you built it then slowly adds the twist. Itz beautifully penned down with a very nice flow

Excellent job
5/5 from me

Such a sad loss that unfortunately a lot of kids and young adults must experience. but i think you did very well on this piece. my only question is... i could be mistaken, but shouldn't there be a question mark after "Will you make me my lunch for school, mummy"?

This is a very sweet yet sad poem.

I will never have a chance to ask you these things
Because you went to heaven mummy, do you have wings?
Thats just another thing that I cant ask you
I wish you could see me now mummy, I grew.

My favourite part, rather touching.

Great work.
One Of My Favourites x

Well not about personal experience ,

if that si not a personal experiecne ad you expressed this way , i can nto imagein how a real experience would be expressed ,

the rhyming waas exceptional in everyway ,

mumy , the wrod used , not used mother , or mom
but mumy this choice of word was very meanfull , and the questions were like made me cry

great job