I'll be there

by Nanita   Nov 11, 2008


When you need me, I'm your girl ..

I'll be there when you call my name
I'll take away the pain,
I'll give you anything.
I'll be there.. sunshine and rain,
don't wana play no games..
I hope you feel the same.

iloveyou<3

I'll be there to guide you through,
.. to cry with you and comfort you
I'll be there to walk with you
.. to talk to you..
I'll give my best to you

I'll be there for [y0U]

[chris&caro]

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  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is a cute love poem, but there were a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes that drew me away from this piece, and made it harder to read. Here are my suggesstions:

    "When you need me, im your girl .."

    "im" should be "I'm".
    And throughout this poem you have "ill", which should be "I'll" because what you put means something else.

    "ill be there.. sunshine && rain,
    dont wana play no games..
    i hope you feel the same."

    First line- & should be spelled out "and".

    The rest I thought was cute, you really love him..

    That's really it, just correct the "ill"s, "&"s, and all of the "i"s should be capatalized. I thought this was a bit repetitive and was cliche. It was a bit hard to read, and so I think a lot of work could be done on this poem, it just seems to be a rushed poem. Take care, keep writing, always and forever...