Awe so sad hun, but a honest and wonderful write. Keep up the good work. 5/5

Complex :)

I really liked it. Once I got to the old men staring down part it clicked that it had to do with death, and the dead looking down on you as you look up on them. That was cool. :] The metaphor in the first lines was good too. I like that better than just plain out saying stary sky. Five out of five.

A really beautiful descriptive poem, especially the part about the cloth with holes in it:) I loved the sadness in it, because it was portrayed so delicately:)

Take care!

5/5 Ingrid

Hey u know what the way u expressed the black cloth with a million holes reminds me of this morning when i tried to cover myself with the blanket to go back to sleep only to see the sunlight penetrating thru the small holes...

Well there is lots of metaphors goin on here
as i was tryin to read between the lines...n I must say tt it is a sad story indeed having to lose a person who is very close to you who died at a very young age.

I must say tt i really enjoy reading it
5/5 from me

Aww this is incredibly sad, but so well written. the originality of it was amazing.. keep up the fantastic writing.. it really was terrific.
wow..
5/5