Short and to the point, well written.

Complex :)

Wow, there were some really wonderful comparisons in this, and it just got me to thinking about a lot of things. How lies can control us and make us so "out of tune". Esspecially when it involves secrets and deceit. wonderful poem!

Heh. this is veryy good. its short.. but who cares. it had perfect flow, rhyme, and just overall GREAT!

Keep it up.

Fantasy.

Lol R u writing a poem or a song? =P I liked the feel behind everything. I felt the emotion and sadness between the words. It was good, I liked how it was short (lol not 2 much reading =P) but the feeling was still there. Personally I think that the rhyming was 2 much. It was almost like every word @ the end of the line rhymed. I mean every reader is different as well as the writer. And some ppl do like that. And I'm not saying that it was bad, it was good but I personally don't like all the rhyming. But that's fine. Like I said, every1 is different. And as long as u like it, that's all that matters. ^.^ But lol my point is, ur poem was good. ^.^

.:Rach:.