Comments : Painful Life

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow. that was hard hitting. firstly, i loved this, really really powerful and you did a great job.

    Edit : Pain is the only I ever felt
    .... Pain is the only THING I ever felt?

    I guess I was never meant to be happy
    I just wish my mom never had me

    ^^ these lines really jumped out as it was like a littl child speaking and its words and feelings and thoughts that should never have to be in anyones head. you do deserve happiness and you do belong here!

    No one sees the pain I go through every single day
    I wish I could go somewhere, just run away

    ^^ maybe writing is your escpe to run away to, because i can now see your pain through this poem. so keep it up and more people will ntoice and then that will show you people do and can care. i do.

    Even when my dad would hit me with his black belt

    ^^ i think you did really good to add this line in because it shows the strength of the emotional pain you feel inside compared to the physical pain you have been through. and that shows the very big difference. well done

    Again i really liked this poem and you kept me interested fro start to finsih with a great title and a great flow.

    5/5 well done. xx