We Will Forever Lay (Collab)

"It just gets harder now and then,
Find myself thinking back to when.
When you were here, here with me
And into your eyes I could see."
^This has to be my favorite part. It's so well written. It nearly perfectly describes how I feel sometime.^ Everyone has lost some one, Joe. I know that you don't know me, but I, myself, have lost a few people to cancer. 'Tis a horrible feeling. But it does get better. I promise. If ever you need to talk to someone, I'm here. Maybe, sometimes, it's better to talk to someone you don't know. Anyway, this poem, however sad, is amazing. Very well written, to both of you. Keep it up.
=5/5=
~Bella<3

Wow, amazing that this is the first poem that I have read since my grandmother passed away and its about the loss of a loved one... sometimes you have to wonder..

Anyway, the ryme scheme stayed preasent throught the entire poem. The rythm was on target and as I read through this poem i coudl get a clear image in my mind of what you were talking about. I could relate to what you were saying and it alamost made me cry. You have such stong emotions in here.

My favorite lines are:
Months, weeks, and days; hours, minutes, and seconds.
Time's passing by, however; my heart's stopped in time.

I feel the same way

Well Written
Darkcrystalbtrfy

Romantic poem, I found it beautiful.
I like that it was written so simpley and ryhmed so well, for me thats talented.
But I don't know about the flow, sometimes it was hard to read like it was chocking, maybe it was because the poem had 2 writers.
Sorry, but I felt a bit lack of passion also in it, maybe you should try bringing in some moments you shared with this person, right now it's all about your emotions towards the loved one.
I see that the other writer is female, like got me thinking that maybe the poem is tiny bit about you two missing each other. Because that person death didn't have significant meaning well it just looked to me so, because you are more focused about how you wanna be with that person and the feelings you have. I might be completely wrong like usual, but I understood it so.
But overall I really liked it.
5/5

I'll be honest, I'm not really sure what to say. The rhyming was irregular, the flow was definately 'off and on' and there were some repetitions which made the line somehow sound wrong. And yet, I really enjoyed reading it. Everything about this poem works, because it has qualities you can only find in collaborations. Different writing techniques, different words and different language make this poem edgy and original. I particularly liked
'Somewhere up so high;
Where souls collide,
Where I can let go of the grief inside.'
It just sounded so good, there were other outstanding parts as well but I won't list them here.
Overall, great effort from both authors thanks!

Sole x

A collab poem is quite hard to create i have done a few but to mix two writing styles into one is hard, i found yall did a terrific job may i add breathtaking, my favorite two stanzas were the last two. The only thing that i didnt like about this poem was that it was kinda cliche, good but i didnt feeel as though it was original but i have to say its hard to find a good original love poem