by Italian Stallion Nov 13, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Weeping now, I don't know what's begun. |
The imadgry is amazing. I could imagine that I was in front of heaven and its gates staring upwards. Once again I like your use of proes. |
by Miu
I so adore this poem. It was ah so beautiful and powerful. With this like " Wipe those tears away." Could almost feel like I had tears on my face. That's just incredible! Like you are taking the poem reader in the depths of emotions of the grievers, and even thought it didn't ryhme it still flowed great. I liked that |
The mood in this poem changes from the beginning to the end which I thought was excellent. You start it out as something sad, losing someone youre close to and love.. and then realizing they go to heaven in the end .. kind of lightens the poem up a bit. :] Well done. Touching write.. short, but says a lot. Great work. 5/5. |
Very short and sweet. I love the ending. It makes the poem not seem all that sad. It gives hope =) Only one thing seemed a little off. |
by Sourav
It's a good poem with lot of emotions. Very touching. But you should certainly change the word 'sorrowness'. Because that's not the correct word. Keep writing. |