Comments : Damaged

  • 15 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Well, I liked the meaning to this, it was interesting. One thing I found that i don't think you meant to do, In this stanza:
    "All the signs say
    Your going the wrong say
    And hearts will soon fray "

    I think the second line, last word, was supposed to be "way" instead of "say"
    :]
    I didn't really understand this that much.. Like, i got the meaning, but you randomly went from 4 line stanzas, to 3. I didn't really like that. It was odd. Other then that though, its really good.
    Keep writing.
    5/5