Wow, I must say the flow and structure of this poem was excellent. I loved your choice of words as well as your rhyming. Fantastic write, keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe

This was so very well written, I absolutely couldn't find a single thing or flaw in this piece.. it was absolutely very well done. The flow was amazing and each word just rolled off my tounge so nicely. VERY well done, I'm so impressed. If I'm able to nominate this, I am nominating it. Word choice just simply blew me away as well! Well done!! 5/5 - VERY well deserved.

This was a very good read and I enjoyed it very much.

If I had to pick something that I thought might have taken away from the poem, it's perhaps the over desctive nature...if that's really takening away from it, I think not but some might.

I really enjoyed this poem as it showed the physical signs of what happens when a person in is in love..as well as other enjoyable notes.

This was a very good poem.

5/5

Interesting poem. I liked the fact that you took a subject and made it your own, using original imagery. Personally, I felt there was too much gore to the poem, even at the end, when it softened slightly, you leave us with blood and bruises on our minds. Just because it wasn't my kind of poem however, if this was the intention then awesome job!

Sole x

Your use of words in the first stanza truly captured my attention and made me curious to read more. The imagery here was flawless and I felt as if I was seeing everything with my own two eyes. Everything about this blew me away! I felt chills up and down my back along with goosebumps on arms because you story you told was truly a dark one with tints of love. Very well written.

Well done!
*5/5*

Very well done. You have my praise. Only one thing stuck out to me, and that was in the first stanza you rhymed body with body it threw it off a bit but not enough to earn you a 4

5/5

Vaughn

Wow, This was so deep and touching truely beautiful. Also, nice vocabulary and you have amazing imagery.
I specialy loved this line:
"As tears dry up and turn flaky brown"

5/5

Im increadably sorry for the delay

Your rhyme scheme through out your poem wavers a bit. It goes from rhyme to proes. Just thought that I would point that out. It nota bad thing I was just wondering if you had done it on porpous. The imadgry was good while reading this poem i could get a clear image of what you were talking about.

My favorite lines were:
The four chambers of love only leak blood
Overwhelming the body with sorrows flood

You have such strong emotions in these lines.

Well Written
Darkcrystalbtrfy

I like the title of this poem it made me feel interest for reading it.. and its nice piece 5/5

Aww how cute^^ That was amazing! You have a great way with words, nice job! Thanks for also reading me work :3 Means a lot!

Demi!~