by Courageous Dreamer Nov 14, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
*This is a little cliche, I know that. Sorry. I am just writing from actual feelings and wanted to finally put this dream of mine into words.* :] |
No offence, but this poem needs a lot of work before it even comes close to being a excellent write. The puncuation was good. Your overall concept of the poem was well thought out, but with a few adjustments this could be an outstanding write. For one if you can split these "paragraphs" into stanzas the structure would be good. Other than that minor detail, I think this was very well written, great job, keep up the good work. |
by X Harlea X
Wow temps..this was awesome. it was filled with a lot of love, and obviously deep emotions that you have been wanting to write out. this was beautiful and i loved the ending to it. great job and keep it up. 5/5 |
This is one of my dreams in life, to find someone who is truly there for me, nice poem, it may be cliche but the words you choice make it different^^ |
by Brittany C
This is a beautiful poem. The wording was great and really created the mood of the poem. There is nothing wrong with it being a little cliche. This is a poem of what people look for in love and hope that something along these lines will happen to them. Good job =) 5/5 |
by Hollymariee
Yes , a little cliché , but i like the imagery and the way your words flow into one another . Good job . 5/5 |