by Niinaa Nov 15, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Wipe away the tears on her tear stained face. |
by Sole
I liked the beginning. I liked the rhymes. This may not have been intentional, but it improved the flow as well. Some lines were slighty cliched, but it turned me inside slightly, we can all relate to poetry like this at some point. Overall, nice work. |