Very lyrical, yet playfuly warning your would be lover
clever hook

"Oh i see you around walking
with you smile like your
oh so proud?"

The way you worded the 2nd line makes no sence. Try puting "with you smiling like your" instead. It makes more sence that way.

"Ive" in 2nd stanza 3rd line. Should be I've. Thats nothing big. Same thing in the 3rd stanza 1st line.

Other then those small things it was a great poem and I really liked it. Almost everything was perfect about this poem. I gave it a 5/5

You have good flow in this poem along with emotion. It wasn't my favorite by you but it's still a decent poem. You did a lot better with the line endings and such, there were a few parts that I seen needed a bit of fixing but overall thats better with this poem. I thought parts of the wording were off, such as;

Once upon a time i used to
be just like you a lonely little
fool.Now I'm on top and it feels
pretty good knowing i wont be stopped."

Maybe try; Once upon a time, I used to be
just like you, a lonely little fool.
Now I'm on the top, it feels pretty good...
knowing that I won't be stopped.

- I just switched out some of the 'fillers' and exchanged them in different parts with different ones.