I'll follow you there, but here I'll remain
A ghost of my past filled only with pain
``I love these two lines. They're my favorite in the whole poem. I also love how they're at the end of the poem, because it left a huge impact. At least on me. It's like.. you're still with him wherever he goes. Like.. he can't leave you behind, because you'll always be a part of him.

I really love this.. and it flowed so well. I really appreciate poems that flow good. It just helps with the overall meaning.

Great job!

Cayce.

**applauds** Really good 5/5. You really find a way to hit the soft spots

Deep and sad and a lot of feeling i know how it feels

I have fallen in love with your writing! It has been a long since someone has made me swoon, but swoon I have. What really caught my attention in this poem were the symbols you created, a hero who couldn't fall, a crownless king. Symbols are very important and represent what we hold dearest. You brought the reader along with you and made them understand just how it feels to lose that special something.

LOVED it
keep writing!

Another great poem.

Again, it held my attention from start to finish and held the all-important power words.

This seems like such a mature poem for a younger writer (even though Im only 9 years older than you). The poem was just ... great. Nothing negative to point out. I have read a few of your poems now and they all seem to flow like a well written song. Maybe you could explore a new avenue of your talent.

After I read it a few times, I realized that the entire poem was about the same subject, but you didnt introduce it until the end of the poem. I think this is what held my attention so well. The entire poem was about an empty pain in your life, but the subject wasnt mentioned until the end. Then it was like a flashback over the entire poem putting all the peices together.

Another 5/5; great job.