Lost Time (Double Etheree)

"stretched fingerer tips" << stretched finger tips.

"lost to us forever more
taken by the cheating, killing.
Days pass away unaccounted for"

^^ loved those lines. very well written.

"Mothers and fathers taken to soon"
^^ to = too

"Memories left but fade away"
^^ Memories left now fade away.

"as new memories come
and push away old"

^^ as new memories come,
to push away old.

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You did a really good job with this poem. A few minor things can be fixed and such. But, other than that you've a good poem. I think these are really hard to write, so I definitely give you kudos for doing a good job with this one.

How very true, all of it...it made me sad to read it:( Time waits for no one and everything must come to an end...all so very true.
A much beautiful poem by you!

Hugs,

Ingrid

The Etheree is a favorite form of mine and you have used it nicely to write about time. Time is something we could all use more of. You have expressed the loss of time well in your writing. The older I become, the shorter the years seem when in reality they are the same length they have always been. I think these are the lines that resonate the most to me because it is true memories fade and are replaced with new ones.

Memories left but fade away
as new memories come
and push away old
now lost to us
forever
passing
Time.