Comments : Facade

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Very nice poem. It was easy to read and understand. Everything about this poem was good. Keep up the good work. I gave it a 5/5. =)

  • 16 years ago

    by isabel

    This surely is filled with emotion... yet you tend to lose a little bit of your great talent for wording... It flows better than any other poem i've read until now, though... (i know, it's hard to focus on many things at the same ttime :) )

    the ending is wonderful...again...
    (you seem to have always great endings :) )
    Your last stanza is completely marvellous...

    5/5 as well
    *isabel*

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Little Dreamer

    I can definitely feel and understand this poem quite well. I used to go around wearing a happy smiling mask and it took a long time for me to get over wearing that mask and say screw you I will feel what I want to feel whenever I want to. If you don't like it oh well. There is so much fakeness in the world since people feel the need to put up walls and fronts to not let people see the real them and thats sad. If people were more accepting of others the world would be much brighter and more real. The flow of the poem was ok, some parts I would change and bring the last line up to mesh well with the others. Also punctuation always helps to emphasize breaks but I won't tell you to change your style. Keep up the good work!