The Freedom Of the Sea

Mary Anne, Thank you for your very kind words and taking the time to give your detailed comments about my poem! I really appreciate them.

"Brave sailors who sailed distant seas
In ages, crossing Neptune's realm
Sweet treasure's call, their minds, it pleased
Through surging waves, they took the helm."

Such a captivating opening, I can tell this is going to be a masterpiece of a nature poem.

"With sextants held neath silver stars
They plied swift currents in the breeze
And sailed their ships to islands far
Past harbor lights and port cities."

Wonderful descriptions, the rhyming and flow were right on target!

"For what rich treasures spurred their quests
For gold or silver, were they sent
With wanderlust that never rests
To ends of earth they gladly went."

I love your wording here, its so vivid and entrancing!

"But give me treasure that is real
The chance to write some poetry
On swirling waves, this heart will heal
And feel the freedom of the sea."

Your words are so meaningful and deep, I am very much so caught into this poem by your lovely words.

"Don't want to stay here anymore
And drown in my uncertainties
I'd rather hear the ocean's roar
And see Gibraltar's majesty."

Well-expressed emotions and thoughts, bringing the reader into this piece further.

"And know that I shall join someday
Those ancient mariners of yore
And reach that land so far away
Elysium's enchanted shore."

Excellent ending, you have a great talent in writing, and I enjoyed reading your work!
So brilliantly written, with mind-blowing words and visuals! 5/5 from me, take care!

~MaryAnne