These seemed more like a soliloquy to me than anything
i thought it was great, heartfelt, and filled with emotion.
great job :]

That was a very well written poem. You utilized the tempo of the poem extremely well, whether you did it on purpose doesn't matter. From the very beginning I felt a sense of urgency almost, it's very overwhelming to begin with lightning and raindrops "injecting life into the land." I love it.

"Our names fit as an abuse of alliteration"

That was a fantastically well written line. I'm being serious, very nicely done. It's almost comical in my eyes - the way you used something as small as alliteration to show discomfort I mean.

I also enjoyed your choice of diction. It was very fitting for your topic, and your writing style. My personal favorites were "blood and oil." That was a great contrasting comparison.

"Sometimes lightning seems the only light."

Best line in the poem. Dramatic, interesting, almost saddening, and great. Always nice to finish the poem at its strongest.

Great poem, 5/5.
Keep up the good work, I always enjoy reading your poems.

Wow, you have a lot of talent. My poem looks like child's play in comparison. Your vocabulary is amazing. The words you rhyme together are awesome. It flows nicely, and puts a vivid picture in my mind.

It kinda confused me I have to admit. When you start talking about someone and kinda drifted away from the driving. Maybe I'm lost in the rain as well >.< Other than that I really like it =) Shows how talented you are in writing poetry. 5/5 Excellent.

I really, really like this. The mix of nature and emotion has always stood out to me. And the story you told within this is relatable. I love the metaphors and meaning between the lines. This is one of the more straight forward poems you've written in a while and I have to say that it's my favourite out of the last couple. I think. They're all so good aha.
Just one thing, in this line;
'While putting hand breaks on before the light shines green,'
Breaks should be 'brakes'. But maybe you meant it that way? I'm not sure.
Anyway, excellent write, my love.

Ily xo

Just Fair Poem...

Actually, I don't live Miscellaneous poem :( But this one (your poem) is really nice I gives (4/5)

Interesting take. I would say that the ligthening if I had to take a guess, is Anger? and I would believe that's the only emotion that this person can feel?

It's written in a very interesting style, but that is not always a sure sign that a poem is going to be good, this one I did find good.

Forth and Fifth stanza, it seems like there should be another line between them to keep the flow matching. There are points when the syllables don't come close to matching up with the previous sentence, and times when you didn't rythme when you tried to rythme the rest of the poem.

It was over all a 'good' poem and I enjoyed it. It's something that will keep most people guessing.

4/5

5/5 sorry >_>

Lightning, the only light.... hmm that sounds nice, you could do a whole string on that topic.

5/5

Vaughn

I was captured by this poem from beginning 'til end. It was elegant and quite amazing to be honest. I really don't see a wow factor in it, but the way you described the feelings and used the similes and metaphors just captured me. It had just a hint of elegance to it, but not too much. A few changes and I believe this poem will be absolutely perfect. You have astonishing talent, my dear.

"A fan of flashes that come in all white."
** I don't really get how it can be a 'fan' of flashes. I guess I kind of get it, but I thought it was an odd way to put it. Very interesting though. Good first line.

Rain drops are just needles to inject life into land,
** "Rain drops are just needles that inject life into land," << sounds a bit better that way and flows better as well.

Sliding not slipping through roads tight as held hands,
** This line does make sense to me, but I think that it'll flow better as "Sliding not slipping through roads as tight as held hands". Since you are using a simile.

Don't walk alone down alleys or dirt roads at night.
" Don't walk alone down alleys nor dirt roads at night" << I've never understood the difference between or and nor, lol. But, I always thought that nor sounded more elegant and less blunt, therefore I think that with your poem it would be better to use "nor".

Okay woow. I was so impressed with this write.. most lines had a touch of uniqueness and originality..I love your way of thinking and writing things.

"Rain drops are just needes to inject life into land"
`Wow. This one was line that I was highly impressed and nearly speechless after reading. I just could not believe the word choice here. You refer to the rain drops as needles that inject life into the land.. Injects?.. Talent! :] You have your way with words.. that is for sure! I LOVED the way you worded this line.. it is very original through my eyes!

I'm very impressed with this piece, you have basically left me speechless.. and I was very pleased when I read that it won today.. this piece is very deserving.. its not like your normal poem.. its above and beyond that, it is overflowing with originality and uniqueness. I am so impressed! :] Gosh I wish I had your talent! Well done!

5/5. Very well deserved.

Excellent write... simply amazing... the imagery is superb... well deserved Win...

"Sometimes lightning seems the only light."

^^ very touching and powerful line...

keep writing...