Awe , this is really cute . I would personally be thrilled if anyone wrote something like this for me . BUT , the rhyming isn't the best quality and your flow is much off . Theres ALOT of potentiel to fix it up . Good job though .. It really is adorable . 4/5

I like that you posted the INSPIRED BY line; most people don’t do that.

A few things to point out.

“I am not nearly as poetic as I thought I'd be
To express, define in words what you are to me”

The second line breaks the flow too much. Maybe replace TO EXPRESS, DEFINE with TO BE ABLE TO. It flows better. Using commas early in a sentence really affects the flow.

“So just look at my GAY facebook pic, it might make you laugh”
The first word, SO is not needed. I would start with JUST LOOK… I’m not sure the word GAY is needed either. It shows an immature tone in a poem that is otherwise very mature.

“So I tried to Google a word that exactly describes you”
Again, SO is not needed.

It seems like the rhymes are forced; like TAKING and RACKING. Although they are spelled alike, they do not rhyme very well.

I really enjoy most of the words you chose; “Charismatic, photogenic and angelic”, “Luminous, gorgeous” “mesmerizing” “Countless” “malicious”. They show an intelligent mind and add power to the poem.

Only other thing I suggest is to try and keep the sentence lengths the same. A long line followed by a short line breaks up the flow.

Overall, very well written. Keep it up.

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