I liked this poem and it had a good point. There wes a thing or two that I saw that you could fix to make this poem better.
1. Ibelieve...this is such a small thig to fix.
2. Don't use numbers like 2. It takes away for the poem a little. Just spell it out.
3. The format could be better. The way it is right no kind of takes away from the flow some.
Other then those things this was still a pretty good poem. I gave it a 4/5.