Torn Apart

Hello.
I gave you my heart
You gave it back
All torn up
And ripped to shreds
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I liked this stanza. I thought it was a nice opening.

You didn't love me
I never knew
Its torn and broken
Because of you.
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Should be "it's" not its. The form you used indicates possession.

The way things are
The way things were
The difference then
We were only friends.
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The rest of your poem seems to be using a rhyme scheme. This doesn't work there. This stanza doesn't rhyme.

The way you turned my world around
Has left me so confused.
Loving you has left
Me torn in two.
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Just as an opinion, I think that 'me' should be the last word in the third line instead of the first word in the fourth line.

I'm sure you've seen the tears
Trekking down my face.
Words i couldn't say
Not even to your face.
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"Trekking" means: journey on foot, especially in the mountains. I don't think this is the word you meant to use here.

To see you now
Its hard on me
Letting you go
Is not easy.
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Once again, the "its" should be a contraction.

The Tears I shed
The Love i Lost
What The Hell Happened
To Us!
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I don't like the way the last lines here fit together. This stanza also doesn't rhyme.

The way I feel
Will it be returned?
Have you lead me on
From start till end?
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Doesn't rhyme. Other than that , I like this stanza.

The smile you gave me
That weakened my knees
It's so hard to believe
That we weren't meant to be.
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Nicely written.

The feelings come,
The feelings go
As days go by I
loose control.
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Ibid.

Youd bee the One
My first real love
Its a dream I know
Should I just give up?
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"Youd" should be "you'd." "Bee" should be "be." "Its" should be "it's."

I'm sorry that I love you
Im sorry that I care
But even being your friend
I something i can't bare.
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"Im" should be "I'm." The last line doesn't make sense. I think you meant to put 'is' where "I" is.

I liked the basis of this poem. There were a lot of errors, but I think it could be really good if you fixed the problems.

Thanks for your comment on "Just Like That."

Skye