The Right Guy

by LiveMyLifeOnALullaby   Nov 22, 2008


What happens when you find that one guy,
The one that's different,
The one you thought was "Mr. Right?"

Then,
You lose him.

He's gone.
And you tell your friends you've moved on,
But you haven't.

You just don't want to hear,
"It's okay, it just takes time.
It wasn't meant to be.
The right guy will come someday."

But time takes too long
And you're impatient.

It was meant to be
And you just screwed it up.

The right guy already came
And you lost him.

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  • 16 years ago

    by isabel

    I find this poem really nice... It has an original structure, without messing up the flow and it has a probable connection with the lives of all of us... Yet, I find also intersting that, instead of saying this was not the right one for you, you say it is the right one and that you lost it... not something i have found in love poems lately...
    I do have some remarks, but i guess it is a matter of personal style...(i'll say them anyway, hope you don't mind... :) )
    I'm not very fond of the expression "screwed it up"... I don't think it fits well...
    I also would change a little bit the second stanza, switch "then" for another word that could emphasize a little bit more the fact you lose that special someone...
    (just a matter of personal opinion, though...)
    other than that, it's a really good poem...
    5/5
    *isabel*

  • 16 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Well as the saying goes "we never miss the water until the well runs dry', sometimes we are someone and thinking who loves us and still thinking there are better out there. Until this person came out of our life we realize, it's the right one. Then our mistakes hunts us and we try to find comfort with words but our heart keeps on crying. I enjoy your write, it merits 5/5, kel.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked this poem because I could relate to it very well. The wording was good. The format was ok but not my favorite because the number of lines in the stanzas kind of jumped around from 3 liners to 2 liners there was a four liner and then 3 sets of 2 liners after that. Maybe joining some of the stanzas together would help and it was also help with the flow of the poem. Anyways I really did like this poem and I gave it a 5/5. Keep up the good work. =)

  • 16 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    *stunned* Holy cow. That hit something in me... I felt exactly the same way at one point in time. Jeesh.

    I like the free verse style that you put this in. it really adds to the poem. I am a grammar freak though, so I do have to point out a few type-o's.

    "But Time takes too long" < time shouldn't be capitolized.

    "The one you thought was "Mr. Right"?" < The "?" should be inside the quotations ("Mr. Right?")

    Sorry, I can't help it. But over all this is a really great poem. 5/5 :)

    Stefanie.

  • 16 years ago

    by BleedingxxAngel

    I love it

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