Eternal Sleep

The only criticism I can offer is for the last line; instead of But as always, time will go on, I'd say, And as always, time will go on.
It seems to me that the sun shining and the birds singing are part of the same vision of time marching on, rather than opposed to it. I don't know if that makes any sense...
Beautiful little poem though.

The sun still shines the birds sing
I would seperate the two ideas in this line with a ; or a comma .

Short poem filled with tons of emotion , I really enjoyed this read . 5/5 from me !

This poem is simple, and at the same time that is what makes it beautiful.

Normally I stay away from the very small poems, but there is something about this poem that seemed different, perhaps it was the similies, which I love, and the fact that you choose not to use adjectives.

This is a very well done poem and I enjoyed it. I really don't/can't say anything bad about this poem.

5/5

Beautiful, sad, hopeful all in one excellent poem.

Wow so short yet it has so much meaning and deph to it so many layers to it i loved it i didnt want it to end, it left you thinking 5/5 its going into my fav!!