Well done.. great flow.. nearly flawless really. The ending was perfect.. and I loved how you kind of stated your opinion in this poem in the end as well.. that was a nice twist.. its always good to hear the thoughts of the writer... 5/5.. I saw this as a great piece, a successful write.

Ummm..... amazing? wonderful? great? perfect? inspiring? lovely? fabulous? which one best describes what i think of your poem? umm... they ALL DO!!!!!!!! like... omg wow. 5/5 all the way. great job Kim ~KM~

Stanzas 2 and 4 seem slightly forced to me, i love the third stanza and most of the rhymes are well written in. I liked the structure and the way you have written about something we all know and have probably questioned at one point in our lifes. Very few have managed to pull it off and you have done just fine. Nice read.

IBE