I really enjoyed this poem. I think that where you broke off the lines in some spots is a bit off. So, I do suggest going back through and changing some of it. If you'd like for me to show you how I think the best way for it to be changed then I will, but I think that as a writer you need to do some things yourself. I really think your wording is great the emotion is wonderful. The flow is off though, which goes back to how you're disconnecting your lines through-out the stanzas. A few minor changes and you'll have yourself an amazing poem (it's great already:])