Structure your lines better so people can get that emotional feel because I had to read it twice to kind of break each line and the second time I was like hejj this poem is actually good. I learnt that because I used to do it too and then people gave feedback and they're like do this and do that. Trust me it works because stanzas allow people to get into the poem you know. Here is an example of how I would do it: |
by Annaam
Very sad. .. . :( |