by Alexander Nov 26, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
secret love
I met you that day |
by Hollymariee
Awe . Okay , you need to pick your rhyme scheme before you start to write , because it's all over the place . It starts out that the whole stanza rhymes , and then it's every two lines .. And then not at all . You need to fix that up a bit . Your lines still flow nicely from one to the other , and you really did catch true feelings in your writting . Well done . 5/5 |