A Simple Haiku (LoVe)

Well what more can be said other than what you have said with this short and wonderful tidbit of emotion. nice job - very nice and I don't usually like Haikus of any sort. Most are bad - yours was not.

I love haikus (or senryu's, I get em mixed up constantly) because its a great demonstration of one's metaphorical abilities as a poet - to cram so much emotion into three short lines and it mean something takes real skill.

With that said, love this. Its not too often I see lvoe related haikus. They're all nature based, which I find kinda boring at times.

The whole thing holds true though. I drew the idea that a man will give up himself, his personality, friends, all aspects that make him him for love. Which is damn true. I see so many friends who are amazing to hang out with, but as soon as they fall in love, its like talking to a wall.

Great write though, very true, adding it to my favs :D

I like short form poetry, such as Haihu's and Senyru's. I believe that Haiku's are written about nature, whereas Senry's are about human emotion (I think)

Anyway, your short verse speaks a lot:

Strange how love can kill,
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I like how you have used 5 x monosyllable words. By doing this it stretches out the first line which in myh mind really allows the reader to think about the meaning of this line and so absorb its impact.

The very essence of man,
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I like the word essence, it makes me think of concentrate, none of the fillers, just the bare essentials, much like this form really!

With a single kiss.
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True to form the last line should sum up the previous two, and this does this very well. It creates a wonderfully clear image too. A kiss, like a magical bond that changes the mans behaviour, redering him a different person forever more. I see this kiss coming from an evil woman whoes only wish is to suck the goodness out of this man and leave him an empty corpes.

Well done.

Michael