I Dislike Titles (With Brackets in Them)

First Stanza;; I get the image or someone walking right by you--and you can just feel that they're leaving; it's over. No words are spoken, because the vibrations of his departing footsteps say everything. You'd secretly given him more chances than one, but he never bothered to turn the sheets and look. So he stomped all over you, but you never walked all over him--hence, the heart on your pant leg, because a heart on your sleeve would be so much easier to see and to take. But despite this, he was the only person that saw you--truly saw you. And for that, you adored him.

Second Stanza;; the irony of cracking a frown when a frown is sometimes referred to as a cracked smile.

Took some time so I can outlive
The leaves on the trees falling beneath me.
`Beautiful lines. You have an amazing originality to you. Your word choice is flawless when it comes to your metaphors. This made me think, that your life had become the relationship, and you made the effort to try and outlive it--because it was as short as the lifespan of the leaves falling underneath you. Stunning imagery.

Even is not square just odd in conversation,
Odd is never even, and an event to attend
Is not something you know how to do.
Flow cannot be rocky only smooth or not there.
And you, four feet under and counting,
Are simply not there at all.
`Your conversations with him are never neutral--I have a feeling it's referring to fighting a lot? That, or he was always in charge. It was his word and his word was law kind of thing. And he never knew how to do anything right. Especially the big things ("an event"). Maybe forgot a big anniversary? Birthday? Your ending is a charming choice. The counting can be interpreted as you counting how far away he is--when really, he isn't there at all. That, or he's far down counting the many hearts he has broken, and the person you thought he was was merely a figment of your imagination--hence, he isn't there at all.

Well done :)
I must say, I am envious.

..__MiNDYY

I comment as I read for the first time, so it should be pretty easy to follow.

Interesting title.

First line; I love the word VIBRATE. Its a very powerful word to start off with; it helps to set the overall mood of the poem. I like the second line, but it seems to conflict with the next few. I can't quite tell whether YOUR under the sheets or not. At first, I thought HE was under the sheets, and you had given him two or three chances.

I am not fond of the "heart on my pant leg" line. I have heard the expression "heart on my sleeve" but I can't relate to the pant leg part.

The rest of the first stanza is pretty good.

The first two lines of the next stanza really confused me. They don’t seem to support the poem, and distracted me from wanting to read on. The third line gets back to the poem, but I would use IT TOO SOME TIME instead of TOOK SOME TIME; just my opinion.

I like the line "I can outlive the leaves on the trees falling beneath me" but I don’t like the line break in it. It really seemed to break up the thought.

I love the next three lines, they seem really deep in thought, like a rhetorical question.

The ending it pretty good too, I like the "four feet under" line.

Overall, a pretty good poem. I like the meaning behind it, but its not one of my favorite poems of yours I read.

The first stanza and the second stanza don’t really seem to blend together for some reason. At first it seemed that you were letting him leave, but then you seem to be attempting to cheer him up. Maybe I read it wrong, but I think you should separate the stanza in to separate poems.

I did enjoy reading another poem of yours though.

Okay, again... I don't really understand how you get your originality.. every one of your pieces shows your talent to take something and turn it into a masterpiece. :] I'm impressed, again.. this definatly deserves a five/five. I didn't see anything wrong with this. The title is so appealing! Wow.. it lured me in a snap! It's like you contradict(is that the right word) yourself.. cause you say you Dislike the Brackets in the titles.. but then again, you go use them.

Impressive write.
Great title!
5/5.

Okay well, i couldn't find anything wrong grammar wise. (good job) but.... i got a bit lost after you started talking about odds and evens.. and then the last two lines... ugh. Sorry, im really confused. Was this about death? Im not sure.. :/ Well, good job anyways.
*Chaotic Angel*

I like this poem. The flow was good and the flow was nice through out the poem. I gave this poem a 5/5.