Comments : Tempting

  • 15 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Wonder if you see me
    Ponder if you care
    See your eyes, they flicker
    With the fire you ensnare
    ^^ very very good imagery intriguing way to start things off!!

    It dances from your finger
    Flows through glowing hair
    Wonder if it burns you
    You seem so unaware
    ^^ observing around you nice ! love the wording!

    Your heart is so elusive
    Your soul, so old and warm
    I'm the flower, you're the season
    With you, I transform
    ^^ becoming one type of action lovely!

    Sitting in a corner
    My air to draw your fire
    A prayer that you will come to me
    To quench your own desire
    ^^ ahh its his desire not yours interesting!

    5/5 !! great description

  • 15 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    Well to be honest I'm not at all for love poems but again I like your vocabulary. I honestly don't know what to exactly say but you have very good poems. NEVER stop writing, no matter what anyone does or what happens. Keep writing =]

    5/5