Comments : Butterfly

  • 16 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    Wonderfull write Emily but if i may suggest, why don't you start your third stanza with , little faithless butterfly ?
    I think the format should have been carried throughout, and your sec ond last stanza *did die* what about just plain *died* it flows better
    Oter than that it was a beautifull poem and for some reason made me think of a ballerina?LOL

    Grant