A raindrop in a ray from sun,
.. This phrase seems to be missing a word , it really doesn't make much sense .

Otherwise , fantastic flow & very uncommon rhymes , which really does add beauty to a poem . It's very well punctuated and it has a very original imagery . You did a fantastic job on this one , 5/5

My most secret star gives glare from the corner of my eye.
A sign that I am wrecked, diseased; that I am about to die.
The star looks around, sees no joy nor no pantomime,
And decides to move away, put an end to my time.
^^what is the star? Great way to have mystery in your opening it really draws the reader in.

The star elopes the eye, leaving moisture in my sight.
My cheeks become its playground where it rests to catch some light.
The star shines so bright now, a raindrop in a ray of sun,
Shouting out that I am broken, how could I ever be the one?
^^the one for what?! You do a great job with the descriptive words and playing around with different images.

The star falls beneath, twinkles to lifelessness on the ground
And I crash down right next to it, but it never makes a sound.
^^...ahh a tear...really a great ending honestly.

I loved the description and emotion. I could not pick out one thing i did not life about it! The last stanza was definitely my favorite : ) You did a great job with answering the questions i had by the end. 5/5

I liked your choice of words and the structure. Good job.