It Was You

4/5. It was good, but not excellent. "pushes me with violence = very awkward phrasing, sounds very forced. I like that you vary your rhyme scheme in different poems. I believe I understand the literal story and I think there's probably an extended metaphor going on here, with that story just symbolizing how your love raised you when you thought you were a goner (i.e. depressed.) However, as always, more specifics will help the reader feel more involved. Keep it up!

I realley love it when a dark poem ends with a positve mysticism

Hiya! =)

Stanza 1:
"It was you... In that cold, gloomy night...
In a dark alley, I walked, alone
Lost between shadows and starlight
Heard, far away, the wind's moan..."

-- IMAGERY! Great.. =) Loved the imagery. Also love this different method. yet again.. A.B.A.B Well done. =)
Really like the imagery you've created.. i feel like i am in that valley and i can hear the winds moan. o.O freaky. =)

Stanza 2:
"Careful footsteps walking behind me
My whole body shaking with fear
Darkness all around me... I can't see...
My most frightening nightmare is so near..."

-- Love the usage of words here too. "careful footsteps", "shaking with fear" and also how you have fitted the last line in quite so well. =)
Very well done. Really liked this one as it is building my suspense up slowly.. and im just waiting for someone to POUNCE! =)

Stanza 3:
"Someone pushes me with violence
The picture before my eyes is so unclear
My soul is being drawn into silence
My mind disconnected... No longer here..."

-- very good imagery again used here. and i really like how you portray this. loved the word usage too "unclear" and "pushes me with silence". very well done. Also the rhyming method.. still really good and the flow is as beautiful as ever. =)

Stanza 4:
"Feeling dizzy, I slowly open my eyes
A drop of blood was staining my face
His body on the ground... He dies...
My life is held by your embrace..."

-- Again such beautiful imagery. very well done for this. absoultely flawless on how you have described such little and the rest of the story unfolds in my mind. Very wel done.

Stanza 5:
"Everything's okay... You are safe now"
My mind begins to focus... Suddenly I knew
That my love would always save me, somehow...
My guardian angel... It was you...

-- this is so beautiful. =) there is so much hope and the way she didnt give in. I also love how you've used the words "guardian angel" because to me, those words are so strong.. and i think that everybody has a guardian angel.. even if they dont realise it.
I also love how you have repeated the title, "it was you" at the start and the finish. Very well done for this. =)

Loved the flow.. as it flowed quite well and also I loved the rhythm and how well it all tied in from start to finish. you had me intwined from the first word to the last and it was flawless. =)

Well done, and keep up the good work!

[ 5 / 5 ]

- Nicole
xox

This is perfect . Flow , rhymes , everything . The imagery is what i loved the most , because I could really see what you were trying to put out . 5/5 for sure , and one of my favorite poems . Very well done .

A sad poem but at the end there's hope. The emotion were well expressed, i like it, kel.