The City of Lights was Dark

Another really great poem!! Had a great ending aswell.. And, I liked the third stanza. And the rhyming and flow were alright, A little shaky here and there, But it was still a great poem. =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

The title makes me think of something else but the poem just sets a great mood i loved it

That's cute. It reminds me of something my boyfriend and I would do. The flow was good aswell as the rythym. I know I can repeat that alot, but I find it rather important.

I really lilke this poem. But its sooo short. You could have added more detail of what heppened, i mean i respect you didnt bore us with stupid details like "I sat down and drank a glass of water" but you should add a little more. But overall its a great poem.

First off I've got to say, great poem. You mend the words easily into keeping the flow throughout the whole poem without disturbing it. You chose almost the perfect words for it and made them work.

Although only a suggestion. It could be better if the was a little longer, because you just get into the feel of it and all of a sudden it ends. And again only a suggestion because I think it works well the way it is, but to interest some of the readers a little more, maybe add another 1-3 stanzas near the middle. Make it more interesting. It doesnt have to be a story, keep the writing up and please comment on some of mine so I can become a better writer as you have obviously become.

Once again great poem and I hope you continue to write more.