very nice poem

Great poem, greater title..this really rocks! Thanx, Timothy r

Hmm... the title reminds me of some place... Paris maybe? This poem is great Sean, you broke through yet another barriar. Not only is the flow, rythm, and rhyme excellent, but this poem is magical and HAPPY. So how does it feel to write beautiful poetry when you're not down? Keep up the great work Sean ;-)
Aken Sol

that was really really really good, i loved the title, it was really well worded all through and very sweet, it was so great!

i love this poem... it is reall good. and it shows how you feel about this person...great work

awww thats such a wonderfull love story! i loved it! i can jst feel the emotion of falling in love!!! nice choice of words!

That was beautiful and so creative the way you focused on your surroundings too!! Very nicely written! Thanx for your help at the forum...

This is great. i really liked the title. the rhyming, the flow and the rythm were all brilliant. xmollyxx

First off I've got to say, great poem. You mend the words easily into keeping the flow throughout the whole poem without disturbing it. You chose almost the perfect words for it and made them work.

Although only a suggestion. It could be better if the was a little longer, because you just get into the feel of it and all of a sudden it ends. And again only a suggestion because I think it works well the way it is, but to interest some of the readers a little more, maybe add another 1-3 stanzas near the middle. Make it more interesting. It doesnt have to be a story, keep the writing up and please comment on some of mine so I can become a better writer as you have obviously become.

Once again great poem and I hope you continue to write more.

I really lilke this poem. But its sooo short. You could have added more detail of what heppened, i mean i respect you didnt bore us with stupid details like "I sat down and drank a glass of water" but you should add a little more. But overall its a great poem.

That's cute. It reminds me of something my boyfriend and I would do. The flow was good aswell as the rythym. I know I can repeat that alot, but I find it rather important.

The title makes me think of something else but the poem just sets a great mood i loved it

Another really great poem!! Had a great ending aswell.. And, I liked the third stanza. And the rhyming and flow were alright, A little shaky here and there, But it was still a great poem. =) 5/5

`Taleee. xx.