Thats a really pretty poem Temps, it smacks of silent contemplation and love, one for what the eye beholds and one for what the heart beholds, really pretty.
You did an excellent job writing for a really difficult character <:-) HAHAHAHA
Well done girl

Grant

Adorable ^-^ Life is colors
You did a great job with this poem. I loved the imagery and the imagination

This is absolutely adorable . I love every line of this poem . Your words flow so nicely , and the imagery is once again fantastic . It's beautiful .. I really have nothing bad to say at all .
The sandy beach resembles a future I long to experience with you,
walking, having our fingers intertwined, filling the spaces, completing me.
^^ my favorite lines ! 5/5

"If you look closely, his name is etched with pure love, forever it will stay."
^This line was worded so perfectly! I could just feel the love oozing from your use of language...amazing.

"The sunlight's rays beam down and reflect from a beating heart ,
infusing tainted shades of yellow into the mix of vibrant colors."
^BEAUTIFUL! The phrase "reflect from a beating heart" was unique! Dang girl I'm so proud of you! Your poetry is truly growing.

"Murky skies symbolizing our past mixes"
^I loved this line! Perfect way to describe the hardships you two faced in the past.

"the contrast of colors makes me realize how things can change with time."
^That's so true! Time heals wounds and changes things into positive rays of light but only if you let it.

This has to be one of my faves by you my dear! I'm not sure why I didn't comment on it earlier. You are truly growing as a poet right before my eyes and I'm so proud of you! Youre taking chances as a poet and they are paying off in your writing. Read this poem and one you wrote maybe a year ago and the change is evident. The imagery here blew me away! Your use of symbolism and was also quite effective in getting your message across.

This was just a beautiful depiction of love. <3
Well done!
*5/5* :]

Hiya! Here i go again =)

Stanza 1:
"A luminous shine peaks through the dark azure skies above,
as my heart so beautiful and plentiful blossoms amidst the clouds.
If you look closely, his name is etched with pure love, forever it will stay.
Everlasting, never fading, this heart couldn't be happier with him."

-- you have such a gift by putting such complicated words into such a plentiful sentence, and creating wonders! Wow, I am breathless. You vocabulary is absolutely magnificant. Well done.
I love this stanza, it really shows how much you live him, and that your heart will always be inlove with him. =)

Stanza 2:
"The sunlight's rays beam down and reflect from a beating heart ,
infusing tainted shades of yellow into the mix of vibrant colors.
Murky skies symbolizing our past mixes with the glaze of the present,
the contrast of colors makes me realize how things can change with time."

-- I think, to me, that this is the 'changing' paragraph. It was all happy and chirpy in the first stanza, and then I read the last two lines, and to me, I think it is the change over. "..realise how things can change with time." -- as if to say, maybe she doesn't love him anymore, or he has changed, and she realises that. Well done, again the word usage is extravagant as ever. Well done! =)

Stanza 3:
"Ripples of water so visible only show how rough the road has been,
but once the breeze stops blowing, everything is so tranquil and smooth.
The sandy beach resembles a future I long to experience with you,
walking, having our fingers intertwined, filling the spaces, completing me."

-- Wow. again, the words you use are so strong, and this poem has sent me so much emotion, and it has felt like someone's slapped me, because to me thats what it fels like. I really like how you've finished with 'fingers intertwined' and 'completing me'. very strong!

Flow was great, and it didnt feel rushed to me. Very well done, a definate 5 / 5!!

Well done, and best wishes!

- Nicole
xox

A luminous shine peaks through the dark azure skies above,<<loved the imagery it was nice to start off with an image in my mind

as my heart so beautiful and plentiful blossoms amidst the clouds.<<gorgeous image here !

If you look closely, his name is etched with pure love, forever it will stay.<<etched i love that word in this line it was a perfect fit!

Everlasting, never fading, this heart couldn't be happier with him.<<i like how you reinforced what everlasting meant with the next words it was a nice little something

The sunlight's rays beam down and reflect from a beating heart ,<<who's beating heart?! guys ?!

infusing tainted shades of yellow into the mix of vibrant colors.<<i love bright colors ! : )

Murky skies symbolizing our past mixes with the glaze of the present,<<glaze of the present that was simply amazing wording it was a unique take on life!

the contrast of colors makes me realize how things can change with time.<<time is the only thing you can not stop !

Ripples of water so visible only show how rough the road has been,<< everyones road is a little different and amount of ripples different but we all have ripples in our water so we have something in common!

but once the breeze stops blowing, everything is so tranquil and smooth.<<this reminds me of watching a sunset on a beach...

The sandy beach resembles a future I long to experience with you,<<ah! more about a beach : )

walking, having our fingers intertwined, filling the spaces, completing me.<<that gave me goosebumps!! great job!

[My promise to you is forever.]<<great promise might i add : )

breathless poem! you are talented : ) 5/5

This is like the most romantic poem ever...the flow was great the imagination was great everything was great I absolutely love every single line of it. The metaphors tt u uses really brings out the emotions tt you want to convey.

Excellent job
5/5 from me

Wow, that was very romantic and beautiful. Your words were mesmerizing and full of love.

"A luminous shine peaks through the dark azure skies above,"

This was a very descriptive opening line, it brought the scene alive to the reader and introduced this poem nicely.
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"as my heart so beautiful and plentiful blossoms amidst the clouds."

This was well-worded and unique, my only suggestion though would be to place a comma after "heart" and then after "plentiful".

Otherwise, this was a beautiful line. "plentiful" was used so well here, it just read so smoothly.
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"If you look closely, his name is etched with pure love, forever it will stay.
Everlasting, never fading, this heart couldn't be happier with him."

Not my favorite lines, but these still held much feeling.
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"The sunlight's rays beam down and reflect from a beating heart ,"

I really enjoyed reading this line, great job!
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"infusing tainted shades of yellow into the mix of vibrant colors."

I loved "infusing tainted shades..", the wording here blew me away and this was so creative, which is what I like about you, you are so unique!
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"Murky skies symbolizing our past mixes with the glaze of the present,"

One of my favorite lines, this was well said. About all the hardships you went through.

I quite enjoyed reading "the glaze of the present", that was a new way to word it.
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"the contrast of colors makes me realize how things can change with time."

So very true, great meaning in this line.
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Ripples of water so visible only show how rough the road has been,"

Very stunning line, but my only suggestion would be to place a comma after "water" and "visible". I think it will read better.
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"but once the breeze stops blowing, everything is so tranquil and smooth."

Didn't like the "so" here, it kind of ruined it for me, just my opinion though.
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"The sandy beach resembles a future I long to experience with you,
walking, having our fingers intertwined, filling the spaces, completing me."

Although this could have been cliche, it wasn't. There was so much passion in these lines, and meaning.
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"[My promise to you is forever.]"

I loved how you ended this piece with just this one line, this one strong and firm line, that will never fade away. That line just struck me, great work!

You have really grown so much Temps, as a poet and this poem showed it. Although some work could be added, the imagery and feeling in this poem was so strong. :)

Take care and God bless you!

~MaryAnne