Wow Souray this was a very well written poem, you express yourself very well and your use of english is excellent although i think you muddled your tenses slightly in the 1st and last stanza (Flows) the s should be at the end of the previous word in both cases , But never the less you did an excellent job in writing an interesting poem and keeping the readers attention
Well done

Grant

I thought this was really amazing. You kept the attention of the reader from the first line. I will be reading more of you works . Thanks for sharing